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I love your black and whites, they remind me a lot of the kind of art style you would have seen back in the late 80s/early 90s -- do I also detect a hint of Jim Lee?
A few suggestions:
I like the set-up to the jump but I think you could have it flow a bit better than it does here. We have that shot to the right of Batman looking at something and then we suddenly seem to have the 'camera' flip around to his left side to focus on his clenched fist. I think this would've looked much better if you gave the impression of the 'camera' simply panning down between the two panels -- so, in the first panel, we'd have Bats looking at something. Then, in the second panel, the camera immediately moves down his left-hand side to focus on his left fist clenching. This would have been more organic and fluid than it is now methinks.
I've just realized now that the third panel with the bat signal is what Batman's looking at. Unfortunately, that panel seems to merge with the last panel showing him jumping -- I actualy assumed at first that both panels were actually just the one, the third panel showing the cityscape behind Batman jumping or something. The problem here is that immediately after looking at the first two panels, the reader's eye is drawn to Batman's cape in the right-hand frame, our eye moves downwards with Batman and is then drawn to the left-hand frame. Perhaps I'm reading this wrong and that was actually your intention but something is slightly off in the flow there.
Also, I think you could have done something to reduce the overall flatness of the piece -- this could have been achieved if you had have shown Batman jumping from a top or bottom perspective, just to break up the overall linearity of the piece.
The colouring job is pretty much bang-on but I think you could have made the lighting effect on the Bat signal a bit more subtle. Rather than just using a solid shape to show the light, I think it would have been a nicer (and subtler) effect if you had have simply shown the signal reflecting off of clouds in the sky or something.
Still, this is definitely among the better fancomics I've seen online (I'm sure you're aware of just how many shite ones there are out there). Great stuff, keep it up.
very great style Erik!